I liked “McMurphy fell 12 stories, hitting the pavement like a Hefty bag filled with vegetable soup.” It gives you a good idea of what sort of person McMurphy had been.
Lynn Viehl (39 novels in 5 genres) is fast becoming my favorite blogger. Her Paperback Writer blog of July 28, 2008 is terrific. It’s titled VW#1: Power Plotting (I think VW = Virtual Workshop). I’ve heard of stories compared to building before, but her use of electricity as the power and the wiring as how it moves through the story, and is delivered, just works for me.
QUERTY Educational Services, Inc has a fun list titled, Analogies and Metaphors Found in High School Essays.